Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that,in today's world,subjects like science and technology are more important than history.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

It is normal that
people
have different opinions
in between
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history
,
science
and
technology
are more important in
this
modern world. From
personal
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point of view, I believe
science
and
technology
are more important at the moment.
This
essay will discuss both points of view, and I will explain why
science
and
technology
are more important.
People
who
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believe
history
is more important than
science
and
technology
,
this
is because they are more curious about the past rather than
future
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the future
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. They tend to know how a country is created, who
are
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our
anctients
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ancients
clients
and what is their story.
On the other hand
,
science
and
technology
are
focus
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on establishing something to make human
are
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more
converient
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convenient
in
this
modern world. Without
science
and
technology
, we cannot solve
people
's daily issues.
For instance
, if we do not have
mobile
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phone
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, we have to write a letter or make a phone call via land phone to contact each other. It is time
consuing
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consuming
to contact
to
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someone, especially when
people
are in emergency situations, they need to contact each other
immediatly
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immediately
. To sum up, I believe
science
and
technology
are more important than
history
, because the two subjects solve our daily problems, and make our life
easiler
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easier
than before. We will need more students to study
science
and
technology
than before, but
history
is not useful in our daily lives.
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