In some countries, too much money is spent by both the government and individuals on national festivals, such as the new year. To what extent do you agree or disagree

National

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such

as the new year

are

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very important events to maintain happiness for citizens. Without these

feast

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held,

public

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would lose connections in the community and will eventually feel isolated. I believe that it is very important for the authority and individuals to spend festival expenditures for two reasons. In

this

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I will state why I think the

government

should invest more in festivals in the

first

half and why individuals should spend more in the latter part.

Firstly

, without the

government

using expenses for

holiday

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,

such

events will lack security. During Halloween, on a street in Korea, several dozens of crowd were reported dead due to the lack of surveillance. It turned out that only a few policemen were deployed near the area and many

people

were on duty somewhere else.

This

led to the street, which is narrow that only several men can walk aside, packed with more than a thousand

people

squishing each other, and many got injured due to the severe pressure generated by the crowd. If the

government

have invested more

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in security during

this

event, no casualties would have been spotted.

Secondly

, I believe that it is very important for each individual to spend a lot of money to create hype for the event. During Loi Kraton, which is the most famous festival in Thailand,

people

float a little boat created from banana leaves on the Mekon river. It is said that a wish may come true if you are praying while releasing the banana boat. Local

people

state that the bigger the craft is, the higher the wish comes true. If an individual spends more capital on the craft, the higher chance that the wish come true. In order to celebrate

this

event, expenses in the boat

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inevitable. For these two reasons, I believe that it is very important for the

government

and individuals to spend money on festivals. If the quality

such

as the security of the festival is very low, there will be fewer

people

joining. The purpose of festivals is to celebrate and have fun. Why not spend a lot of money and smile until the end of the day?