some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Despite many feeling that
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adapting to
adopting
a critical situation in
life
like low income or dissatisfaction with jobs could be beneficial for
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being
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,
however
, I strongly support those who feel that
people
should be more conscious about improvement in their
life
. On the one hand, it is thought that allowing difficult circumstances in
life
helps
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people
to be happy, and honest. When
people
are used to facing critical situations with their satisfaction willingly, they often feel real happiness.
For example
, recently a study has shown in the daily newspaper on ‘Happiness around the world’ that those
people
supposed to be happy themselves, most of them are earning a low income.
In addition
, if
people
can manage their
life
with the shortage of
money
, they might be able ,to be honest in their
life
instead
of involved in corruption.
Therefore
, the circumstances of difficulties in
life
could be advantageous for
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to make them happy and honest.
On the other hand
, in my opinion, the main advantages of endeavours for improvements in
life
are making financial strength for the
next
generation, and spending for additional needs in daily
life
. Most
people
want to earn more
money
than their daily expenditure to secure their families financially, and
this
theory comes from old aged
people
from generation to generation.
For instance
, a survey report has been published in 2020 that depicts 80 per cent of service holders in Bangladesh prioritise their families over themselves.
Furthermore
, a good salary may help to balance our lives because
people
have to spend
money
additionally
for many purposes,
such
as medical treatment, migration, celebrations, and so many.
Thus
, I feel that everyone should be focused on thriving their financial conditions to enjoy their
life
in several ways. In conclusion,
although
a shortage of
money
could bring some positive aspects to
life
undoubtedly,
however
, I strongly feel that improvements in careers have no alternative to outliving on earth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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