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Band 6.5

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Despite many feeling that
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adapting to
adopting
a critical situation in
life
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 like low income or dissatisfaction with jobs could be beneficial for
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,
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, I strongly support those who feel that
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 should be more conscious about improvement in their
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. On the one hand, it is thought that allowing difficult circumstances in
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helps
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people
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 to be happy, and honest. When
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 are used to facing critical situations with their satisfaction willingly, they often feel real happiness.
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, recently a study has shown in the daily newspaper on ‘Happiness around the world’ that those
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 supposed to be happy themselves, most of them are earning a low income.
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, if
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 can manage their
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 with the shortage of
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, they might be able ,to be honest in their
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instead
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 of involved in corruption.
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, the circumstances of difficulties in
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 could be advantageous for
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 to make them happy and honest.
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, in my opinion, the main advantages of endeavours for improvements in
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 are making financial strength for the
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 generation, and spending for additional needs in daily
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. Most
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 want to earn more
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 than their daily expenditure to secure their families financially, and
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 theory comes from old aged
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 from generation to generation.
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, a survey report has been published in 2020 that depicts 80 per cent of service holders in Bangladesh prioritise their families over themselves.
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, a good salary may help to balance our lives because
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 have to spend
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 for many purposes,
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 as medical treatment, migration, celebrations, and so many.
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, I feel that everyone should be focused on thriving their financial conditions to enjoy their
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 in several ways. In conclusion,
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 a shortage of
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 could bring some positive aspects to
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 undoubtedly,
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, I strongly feel that improvements in careers have no alternative to outliving on earth.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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