some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

Although
it is sometimes thought that sharing knowledge and ideas about science, business and education
are
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beneficial, others believe all information should not be given
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unobstructed
. In my opinion, I consider that
scientists
,
businessmen
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and businessmen
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can get
success
if they
share
details and teachers ought to spread knowledge.
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the one hand, some
people
think that
scientists
and traders who
share
details and more info about their
inventions
and
products
often get mass
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engagement and I agree. In other
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,
people
's engagement
about
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with
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their discoveries and
products
motivates them to excel in their fields which,
consequently
, produces
success
and better progress.
For example
,
scientists
and traders generally apply themselves and work harder when
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the
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see
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of
success
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their
inventions
or new
products
.
Furthermore
, being driven to achieve the best is vital in order to succeed later, when
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successful
scientists
or traders
they
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must compete against
other
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others
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in the market with their
products
or
inventions
.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that it is better not to
share
principal information loosely. As
people
, we often misuse valuable things
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that
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are given freely, and some get jealous
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others
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success
. With the help of valuable info, some notorious can start conspiracy against
scientists
, entrepreneurs or even
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teachers
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.
For instance
, one of my uncles shared his secrets of
success
through Media and lost his
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well-positioned
business. Another reason why teachers should not
share
lessons freely
,
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because
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it could bring some uninterested students
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class
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which
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definitely not very fruitful. In conclusion, while
people
may vary their opinions, I think
Scientists
, businessmen or even
teacher
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teachers
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stand
better
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a better
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chance to succeed if they spread knowledge
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and illustrate
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illustrating
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details about their
inventions
or new
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • innovation
  • collective knowledge
  • security risk
  • proprietary information
  • competitive advantage
  • democratization
  • sensitive technology
  • ethical guidelines
  • nondisclosure agreements
  • peer-review processes
  • validated
  • open access
  • regulated access
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