The best way to protect the environment is to use local resource, such as food or building materials rather than transporting resources from other places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that
safest
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means to keep the
environment
safe is by using commodities produced rather than transporting
goods
and services from one place to the other .
However
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each type of resource has its own significance. I partly agree
with
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the
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transporting resources from other
place
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is
best
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way to protect the
environment
. The reasons for my agreement
are explain
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in
following
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paragraphs.
To begin
with , there are many reasons for importing different
type
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types
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of resources from abroad.
Firstly
, it can conducive
environment
for producing
goods
. To explain it , foreign countries produce some of the equipment that our domestic
do
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not produce ,
as a result
so many types of equipment are imported .
For example
, India
imports
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some of the most precious
metal
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metals
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and stones from the US in 1945 , which are produced in the United States worldwide
this
will protect our
environment
In addition
, ordering some
goods
from abroad can be attributed to the lack of conservation
of
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the nation.
Furthermore
, the government of a country needs to invest a lot of money to import any property from abroad, which has a very adverse effect on the economy of the province,rather than
can
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support the same amount in the modern and fundamental development of the
environment
.
For instance
,
according to
a survey conducted in India in 2020, the government had to spend Rs 2 crore to import material from abroad, and our economic situation deteriorated drastically.
Thus
, the loss of imports for the usage of any equipment from outside the country is sufficient to weaken the economic condition of the nation.
To conclude
,I believe and agree
up
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to some extent the many reasons for the use of foreign
goods
, the country is facing the adverse effects of
this
investment.
Therefore
, native time should be used as much as possible to keep the atmosphere balanced.
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