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Today, people in many countries can live and work anywhere they choose, because of improved communication technology and transport. Do the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh the it’s disadvantages?

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 it became
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easier for people to work wherever they want and
this
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trasportation
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transportation
.
However
, there have been arguments about
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. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate the pros and cons of improved communication technology and
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transportation
 based on my point of view and support it with examples as well.
First
 of all, the whole purpose of inventing
techology
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technology
 technic is to provide the
humun
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human
 being
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 facilities and privileges as possible. It is important to work
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 a department you are comfortable
at
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,
therefore
, having easy access to transportation will motivate people
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 their time and effort
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 their profession which for sure will increase
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manpower,
nonetheless
, raising the country's economy.
Nevertheless
, improving communication
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technology
techology
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technology
are
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 meant to be useful, using technic in order to develop
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