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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all their courses in foreign countries .While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #opportunity #study #part #courses #countries
In recent years, there has been
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 in
public
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the public
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 moving abroad to
contiune
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continue
 their studies for partial or
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complete course which in turn bring many perks to them. I strongly agree with the statement since it carries forward a lot of effective changes in the community.
Upcoming
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 modern way of living has bought many changes to the lifestyle of humans. And many students have to go through hard times by funding their education and simultaneously looking after their elderly parents which is making
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the situation
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situation
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situations
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 difficult in developing
countries
 like Africa, Indonesia ,
Bangkok
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and Bangkok
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 etc.
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 International
countries
offers
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eduaction
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education
 as either
part time
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 or full time which
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 the pupil to concentrate on
studies
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their studies
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 as well as
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work some causal hours jobs which would promote their financial stability. Not only, it enhances them economically but
also
 as a learner, it gains them a sense of confidence developing a positive attitude supporting their family at the same time.
For instance
 , there are many people from different
countries
 educated abroad
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 excelling now in their respective fields.
In addition
 to
this
 , there are many western and
european
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European
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countries
 offering scholarships which are sometimes, either fully or partially funded, depending upon the academic achievement of the students from other nations. The ones with high intellectual capacity are being selected and guided towards attaining their dreams. It
also
 makes them realize the significance of the course completion in grabbing an aspired job in their field of study.
Moreover
 being in a multicultural environment makes them grasp new languages,
staying
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broad minded
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 and
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 habits to reach their goal. In order to conclude, whilst getting educated in other
well developed
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soceities
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societies
 has some drawbacks but it outweighs the advantages for the ones who specialized in the course ending up having a beautiful future to the self and the society as a whole.
Although
, leaving the family to continue their studies in a different region makes it harder but the journey makes it worthwhile for the individual.
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