Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all their courses in foreign countries .While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students. Do you agree or disagree?

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moving abroad to

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continue

their studies for partial or

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complete course which in turn bring many perks to them. I strongly agree with the statement since it carries forward a lot of effective changes in the community.

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modern way of living has bought many changes to the lifestyle of humans. And many students have to go through hard times by funding their education and simultaneously looking after their elderly parents which is making

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difficult in developing

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like Africa, Indonesia ,

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etc.

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eduaction

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education

as either

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or full time which

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the pupil to concentrate on

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work some causal hours jobs which would promote their financial stability. Not only, it enhances them economically but

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as a learner, it gains them a sense of confidence developing a positive attitude supporting their family at the same time.

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, there are many people from different

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excelling now in their respective fields.

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, there are many western and

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countries

offering scholarships which are sometimes, either fully or partially funded, depending upon the academic achievement of the students from other nations. The ones with high intellectual capacity are being selected and guided towards attaining their dreams. It

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makes them realize the significance of the course completion in grabbing an aspired job in their field of study.

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being in a multicultural environment makes them grasp new languages,

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and

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habits to reach their goal. In order to conclude, whilst getting educated in other

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soceities

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has some drawbacks but it outweighs the advantages for the ones who specialized in the course ending up having a beautiful future to the self and the society as a whole.

Although

, leaving the family to continue their studies in a different region makes it harder but the journey makes it worthwhile for the individual.

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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all their courses in foreign countries .While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems.

Many teachers follow the practice of giving students task for home often based on lessons taught in class . It is often believed that such a practice should be stopped as it reduces time spend on leisure activities or nonacademic pursuits. Do you agree or disagree?

Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on evironment, eating habit and families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.