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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays it is rose that students prefer to have a gap
year
 before going to university.
This
 essay will examine what is the benefit and drawbacks of
this
 issue. Studying
school
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at school
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 and university is very important for human
life
. Because they should have to choose their future job to work for their whole
life
.
Therefore
 having a
year
 off may have some advantages for the students.
Firstly
, after a long
time
 studying should have to rest for
duration
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a duration
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 of
time
 in other to choose their proper profession.
Furthermore
, it is the right
time
 to start a family
life
. Because family is very crucial
for
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to
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people
's
life
. So most
of
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people
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the people
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 planned their family in the gap
year
.
On the other hand
, it has some disadvantages that effects to
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the career
a career
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career
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careers
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 of the
people
. If the person
get
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 a gap
year
 from
university
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the university
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 may cause their ability to study. Because if it rested for a long
time
, it is hard to receive new things for the brain.
Also
, if
the
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people
 have a
year
 off, it can
effects
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effect
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to study
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studying
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 abroad. Because some universities
has
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have
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 age demands on their requirements. In conclusion, a
year
's
time
 off before pursuing tertiary education has
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the advantages
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advantages
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advantage
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 of better opportunities to
learning
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learn
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 and gaining experience.
However
,
lack
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a lack
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 of proper planning can end up in the wastage of
this
 valuable
time
.
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