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Some experts, believe that it is better for children to being learning, a foreign language at primary school, rather than secondary school, do the advantages of the outweighes the disadvantages.

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It certainly cannot be denied that learning a foreign
language
, opens various opportunities for
children
 some advocates of a foreign
language
 think that learning a new
language
 at primary
school
 is far better far than learning at a higher level. Well, it has some disadvantages and advantages that I will
further
 explain in upcoming paragraphs. As a matter of fact, learning a foreign
language
, and adding a secondary
school
, has more beneficial for them. It opens many opportunities for making their career.
Secondly
, in
this
, they know the importance of learning a new
language
, and they acquire with their choice as well
in addition
 to
this
 day enjoy the time when they learn languages
instead
 of taking the burden.
For instance
, English is now a global
language
 that spread all around the world and each and every student wants to
this
language
 for exploring the world.
Thus
, a foreign
language
 is necessary to learn, for getting global exposure.
In contrast
, learning an overseas
language
 only stays, is not hard for
children
, because in
this
 stays there, the mind is stress-free and their memory is sharp than adults.
Furthermore
, not only did learn fastly but
also
, they learn about other cultures as well.
Additionally
, did get fluency in the
language
 because they speak it for longer years continuously.
Last
, but not least, they feel confident having a foreign
language
. Above and beyond that, they get handsome salaries
to begin
 as a foreign
language
 teacher, so they are not confused about choosing a career option. In conclusion, the actor Henry level is the best stage for acquiring a foreign
language
, but it has some drawbacks as well. Secondary
school
.
Children
 are more mature than primary
school
children
, and no exact benefit of having a foreign
language
.
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