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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
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Some people often argue that families whose children go to private
schools
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 don't contribute to state institutions through taxes.I agree with the statement for the reasons described in
following
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 paragraphs. In the past few decades,parents admit their
offsprings
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offspring
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in
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to
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 one's own
education
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 centres for
their
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apply
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better studies.The main thought behind
this
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 idea could be
'trust'
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the 'trust'
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on
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in
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authority
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 approach.The taxpayers believe that their paid tax will be of no benefit because the politicians and government are not improving the standards of state
education
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.
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,private
schools
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offers
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 better infrastructure,facilities,extra-curricular activities as well as quality
education
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,but these options are not available in
schools
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 under government
authorities
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.
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,
this
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 could
also
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 be a disadvantage for wealthy people because sometimes independent sectors try to attain extra expenses from parents in regard
of
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 various things.
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,Institutions
asks
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ask
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 for more money excluding tuition fees at different times
like
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apply
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,for a trip,picnic ,exams and many other activities.
This
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 is just a method to dig
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a hole
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hole
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holes
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 in an individual's pocket.
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 has an adverse effect on the reputation of
private
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the private
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 teaching structure. To put
in
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it in
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 a nutshell,parents of students studying in non-state-run schooling
doesn't
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don't
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 require to pay taxes,as they get no benefits from state
education
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 schemes.The authority is so
much
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apply
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corrupted that the development of government-owned
schools
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 has taken a pause,
thus
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 lagging behind in the sphere of quality
education
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 in comparison to private
schools
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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