Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In
this
day and age which is called the technology era, a part of youngsters allocate considerable
time
with their mobile
phones
in their daily life. I strongly opine that the attraction to virtual worlds in these devices with the internet’s help is the majority reason for
this
popularity. From my point of view, smartphones
phones
have an
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cons
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and pros.
However
, its disadvantages outweigh its advantages.
First
of all, attracting the
world
of these devices draws children within grasp. The
World
that they can enter with a click.
Moreover
, they can create and build a universe be enjoyable without limited rules.
On the other hand
, their friendship in
this
space is unrestricted.
For instance
, in my country relationship between girls and boys is limited by the government. while, in the virtual
world
and in the internet space, there are no restricted laws. Above all aforementioned points, the variety of entertainment facilities
such
as different online games is the
second
reason that absorbs the youth who spend a huge part of their days on their
phones
. In terms of the negative points of
this
issue, can say the most and
first
result is the isolation of children and choosing unreal friends
instead
of real ones.
This
causes them not
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learn social skills and prefer to stay with
this
tool
instead
of playing with friends and
also
spending their
time
with family.
furthermore
, they addict to their
phones
which decreases youth’s freedom and creativity. They cannot enjoy their
time
without these gadgets. So, they become more dependent on them day by day.
As a result
, they are not able to spend their
time
without it. To sum it up, the attraction
world
of smartphones is inevitable. Children should be educated to identify the negative and positive aspects of these devices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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