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Nowadays many companies have manufacturing facilities in different countries. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

#companies #facilities #countries #development
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As the impact of globalization has increased, many corporations have expanded their businesses to other
countries
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. Some argue that
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 could be detrimental effects on local
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, whereas others hold views that it will eventually make huge profits for everyone. The aim of
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 essay is to explore both points of view and elucidate my ideas .
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 with, there would be huge profits and returns if
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 could have factories in developing
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.
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, our favourite electric device brand
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 as Apple is surely an American company, but the majority of their products are made in the US because the labour costs in the US are too much expensive.
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, many multinational
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 have workplaces in
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countries
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.
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,
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 could be a good diplomatic strategy as many
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 positively accept these expansions.
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, it could unintentionally take away many work opportunities in the
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. Obviously, the
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 they want to enter our so-called poor
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 as the costs of labour are cheap which might be detrimental effects on their economies.
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, they might have tariffs and ethical conflicts between those nations.
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, we have heard much bad news that some multicorporal
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 have delayed in payment of wages,
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 it caused to have
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. To sum up, it is indisputable that there would be tremendous advantageous points of extending
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 across nations.
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, they
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 have to take into consideration they should not exploit them.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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