Nowadays more and more tourists are visiting places with difficult weather conditions, such as the Sahara Desert and the Antarctic region and so on. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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The main reason why

people

are keen on visiting

places

with difficult weather is that everybody

want

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to see something different. One

this

is certain

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that

people

have tired of being in the cities and cars that surround them. For discovering new

places

people

travel from all around the world. Take

for instance

It is obvious that to see pyramids

one

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of the exciting things

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when you see these architectures you freeze for a moment

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because these buildings were built thousand years ago and nowadays

scientist

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are not able to understand without technologies how

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happened. It is clear that it was not easy and thousand

people

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died over the years.

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number of foods and fruits were not familiar to

people

and how their

body

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allow them to carry

such

heavy rocks on top .

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it is worth visiting

such

places

. Another example we can talk about cold

places

like Antarctica. We can count numerous animals that live there and except

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Antarctica

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can not see them nowhere

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can not see them anywhere

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. Far from pollution, noises make those

places

more beautiful and gorgeous. It is very annoying that for sake of money

people

willingly kill animals and cut

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, they do not think about

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acting

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way

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they

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are destroying our future. I hope that as soon as possible government must take

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consideration and act

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Nowadays more and more tourists are visiting places with difficult weather conditions, such as the Sahara Desert and the Antarctic region and so on. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Gap between rich and poor countries. It's the responsibility of richer countries to support poorer countries while others think it's the responsibility of poorer countries. what is your opinion?

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