In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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In many nations around the world,

children

are usually been told that if they

work

hard, they can get anything that they want. There are some benefits and drawbacks towards

this

saying. On the one hand, the merits of telling

children

that they can achieve anything in life only if they

work

hard enough

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will encourage them to

work

harder to achieve a certain goal that they wanted.

This

can give a child the idea that what they are doing will be worth it in the end.

Hence

, they will put more

efforts

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into what they are doing to achieve their goals.

In addition

, it will

also

give

children

a clear goal to strive towards.

This

can help

children

determine what they want and have a clear step to achieve those goals.

For instance

, in order to study abroad in Canada, foreign students have to complete certain

criterias

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criteria

such

as IELTS, their study plan, and their finances. With the aforementioned benefits, there is a major drawback

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doing

this

. It would heavily damage the

child

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self-esteem and

confident

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when they failed. Some goals are

unachieveable

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unachievable

achievable

, and people telling

children

that they can achieve anything with hard

work

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will lead them to failure.

Thus

, giving them false

perception

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about life and

also

broke

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their

confident

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confidence

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For example

, telling

children

that they can create a time machine, which is theoretically impossible, to go back in time and fix their mistakes

everytime

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that they do something wrong. In conclusion, encouraging

children

by telling them that they can attain anything just by hard

work

does have

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merits by giving them a clear goal and motivation to

work

hard, but

also

have a major disadvantage that it will damage the child

confident

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confidence

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when they fail.

Submitted by NHD on Mon Jan 02 2023

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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