In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

In many nations around the world,
children
are usually been told that if they
work
hard, they can get anything that they want. There are some benefits and drawbacks towards
this
saying. On the one hand, the merits of telling
children
that they can achieve anything in life only if they
work
hard enough
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will encourage them to
work
harder to achieve a certain goal that they wanted.
This
can give a child the idea that what they are doing will be worth it in the end.
Hence
, they will put more
efforts
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into what they are doing to achieve their goals.
In addition
, it will
also
give
children
a clear goal to strive towards.
This
can help
children
determine what they want and have a clear step to achieve those goals.
For instance
, in order to study abroad in Canada, foreign students have to complete certain
criterias
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criteria
such
as IELTS, their study plan, and their finances. With the aforementioned benefits, there is a major drawback
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doing
this
. It would heavily damage the
child
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self-esteem and
confident
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when they failed. Some goals are
unachieveable
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unachievable
achievable
, and people telling
children
that they can achieve anything with hard
work
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will lead them to failure.
Thus
, giving them false
perception
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about life and
also
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their
confident
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.
For example
, telling
children
that they can create a time machine, which is theoretically impossible, to go back in time and fix their mistakes
everytime
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that they do something wrong. In conclusion, encouraging
children
by telling them that they can attain anything just by hard
work
does have
it
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merits by giving them a clear goal and motivation to
work
hard, but
also
have a major disadvantage that it will damage the child
confident
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confidence
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when they fail.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Perseverance
  • Resilience
  • Self-esteem
  • Confidence
  • Goal-setting
  • Work ethic
  • Ambitious
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Frustration
  • Inadequate
  • Overemphasis
  • Stress
  • Pressure
  • Mental health
  • Resource availability
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