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Modern Lifestyle mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much as attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

#lifestyle #parents #time #children #attention
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Nowadays both
parents
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 are working for the
child
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 and to survive in society. And unable to spend proper time with kids
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 the
child
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 gets away from the love of
parents
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. I strongly agree with the statement because many children suffer from mental health issues. To commence with,
Parents
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 always think about their children and are ready to fulfil all their wishes. For the happiness of ,kids
parents
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 are doing hard work to give them the best education and help them build
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. But they forgot about the love and time which is most important to give them, these are the things in grew up. In a recent survey conducted on
child
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 mental health in schools in , the USA it found that 60% of kids are mentally weak and the reason for
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 is attention not getting proper from
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.
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, many
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 start earning more and more earing and they hire a babysitter for the
child
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 to take care of or give to grandparents so that they grow in their career. Sometimes
parents
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 want to live a luxurious life and carry forward to their children like they try to give the world's best education, and
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 go on an international vacation trip and do many more things and these things give them happiness at the cost of taking away love and affection of
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 and getting detached from
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 once they start earning.
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