IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

2. What are the pros and cons for children of watching television?

#children #television
Technology has emerged as one of the most important learning resources in the modern era. People do,
however
, believe that teenagers' lives may be impacted by their increasing use of technology, including television, mobile phones, etc.
On the other hand
, some people dispute the idea that
kids
 may pick up new skills by watching TV. I'll talk about the benefits and drawbacks of watching television.
First
 off, using social media platforms is becoming more and more frequent among adults as well as
children
. When we talk about whether
kids
 should watch television? The
first
 response that springs to mind
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
 "YES"—the benefit of letting
kids
 watch TV is that they can pick up new skills from shows like cartoons with brainteasers. These kinds of programmes can aid with IQ development, which is far more important than physical wellness. These days,
kids
 may learn craft skills, drawing, and much more from innovative shows
in addition
 to cartoons.
Second
, we shouldn't forget that the media industry doesn't just produce content for
children
 when it comes to
children
. There are some pornographic channels that neither adults nor
children
 should watch.
Therefore
, parents should use kid lock on these kinds of programmes, like bad or adult movies.
Additionally
, parents can only buy the channels they want to see to keep their
kids
 away from these kinds of programming. I will conclude that
kids
 can watch TV, but only the channels that can help them grow after carefully analysing both arguments. Parents must behave well toward their
children
 if they want to prevent unwelcome content.
Submitted by workforneershah on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • engaging
  • linguistic skills
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • distort
  • optimizing
  • debate
  • implications
  • viewing habits
  • parental guidance
  • educational programs
  • screen time
  • stereotypes
  • unhealthy behaviors
What to do next:
Look at other essays: