the amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? what other solutions can you suggest?

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, more time should be devoted to

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and exercise schools. Personally,

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I agree it is highly beneficial, I perceive there are other ways to handle

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problem as well. Considering the overweight

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worldwide, it is evident that compared to some years ago their proportion has considerably increased. Perhaps the pupils’ unbalanced lifestyle can properly justify

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phenomenon. Not only do

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follow unhealthy

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they have substituted indoor games for outdoor ones.

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, if the schools’ headmasters alter the curriculum’s plans into more physically active ones, the pupils will benefit and their

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will be reduced. To clarify it with an example, a survey conducted in a specific primary school in Shiraz revealed that not only will students lose

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with more

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classes, but

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their educational outcomes will be improved

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of a healthier body. Think there are some other advantageous works that can give a rise to

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difficulty.

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, as it was aforementioned, unhealthy

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have a

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detrimental effect on

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issue.

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, the introduction of a healthy diet at schools can be unimaginably effective. Alternative nutrients and low-calorie

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like fruits, vegetables and milk must be included in

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diet. Meanwhile, students should be obliged to eat these

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of harmful snacks.

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, it may not be wrong if I claim a majority of kids are not aware of the destructive difficulties that are associated with obesity and if their teachers inform them about these troubles, they will make an effort into controlling their

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and pursuing a healthy lifestyle.

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, they can be told about

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heart disease and the breathing difficulties that are caused by high

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, sometimes consultations outperform obligations. To conclude, I would like to maintain that even though exercising at school helps

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with an obesity problem, other methods including the introduction of healthy diets and warning them about the abominable outcomes can have a

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effect.