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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While the gap between the poor and the rich has been expanding in some countries now, there are calls for
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 who earn more than the average increase the GDP (gross domestic product) of the country, which is beneficial to the
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 can expect more inbound
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 spend more
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 salaries which are above the average.
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 can acquire more tax
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 from their earnings, so they can increase the expenditure
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 social welfare.
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 beneficial since expanding the gap
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 has been a social problem in modern
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. Some nations
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’ which distributes enough money for
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 living so that
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 who cannot live
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 their earnings can achieve the minimum living style as human beings in modern
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salaries,
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 can live happily in a
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 which has less competition. In conclusion, extremely high salaries are indeed beneficial to the nation’s economy and the
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 leads to a better
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 in terms of reducing poverty.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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