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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the rising globalization and industrialization, the
climate
 in the world is changing drastically and living beings are facing numerous threats.
However
, majority of the
people
 hold the view that we should get adapted to
climate
change
instead
 of finding solutions to stop it. I completely disagree with the aforementioned view and the following essay will elaborate
further
 with examples. Commencing, with the developing world
people
 have created drastic changes to
climate
change
 and today
people
 ate trying to live with it without finding solutions. When the world tries to develop overnight governments destroy natural lands to build buildings and fill oceans, and lakes will excess garbage which is emitted by factories.
Hence
, different sectors of society have to face challenges
such
 as droughts that can harm food production and human health, and flooding that can spread and damage infrastructure. As an example, in Sri Lanka majority of the rural areas are destroyed by cutting down trees and filling up massive reservoirs with soil which ultimately leads to heavy droughts.
However
,
people
 try to live with serious issues by neglecting them.
On the other hand
, human health is a controversial issue that
people
 have to face today due to
climate
change
. Changes in weather and patterns have put lives at risk where the majority of
people
 are subjected to heat phenomena. As an example, today a plethora of children in middle eastern countries die due to heavy heat conditions where there is no food or water to drink.
Besides
, dry weather conditions lead to wildfires and bushfires which bring many health risks. In conclusion, I believe that as a society
people
 should start preventing
climate
change
thus
 if
this
 condition continues in the future it's we who have to face the most vulnerable risks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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