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Many people keep dogs and cats as companions. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of pet ownership for the animals involved and for the community as a whole.

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Nowadays, numerous individuals would love to keep an animal in their home as their
pet
, as it can be beneficial in various ways. From my standpoint, it is good not only for
animals
 but
also
 for society. So, in the forthcoming, paragraphs I will discuss its merits and a few demerits as well. To commence with the advantages
first
 and foremost is that, pets like dogs can act as safety for some
people
 living alone.
Firstly
, a
dog
 can alert an older
person
 living apart from his
/
her child from any unknown individual entering the house.
Secondly
, a
pet
 doesn't have to roam here and there for food as well as water because protecting its owner
it
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will provide everything to the
pet
.
Therefore
,
pet
-like a
dog
 can play a crucial role in a
person
's life living all alone.
Furthermore
,
animals
 can be beneficial for the community because they can prevent the theft of precious items.
Moreover
, dogs can make
people
 know if any burglar doing any theft by barking at him
/
her continuously.
In addition
, pets can even chase any
person
 and can even catch him
/
her with their mouth if their owner orders them to do so.
Further
, pets like cats can use their nails to scratch a
person
's face if they find any harm that a particular
person
 can cause.
Thus
,
animals
 can play a vital role in society as they can do numerous things some of which are discussed above. Now taking into account the disadvantages,
animals
 can sometimes harm an unknown individual and can even annoy neighbours.
Moreover
, any relative who is unknown to the
pet
 can bite that
person
 if he
/
she enters the house unknowingly.
In addition
, some
people
 have to go to the hospital for wounds given by the
dog
 or any other animal.
Further
, a
dog
 can bark all night because his hearing sense is much higher and it can make
people
 living in society go sleepless.
Hence
, there are some demerits too for keeping a
pet
 not only for the owner but
also
 for the community. To conclude,
animals
 can be extremely beneficial for
people
 living all alone as well as they can prevent any hazardous thing from happening
such
 as theft. But there are a few disadvantages as well for keeping a
pet
 like a
dog
 or a cat mentioned in the above segment.
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