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News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#news #media #people #development
Media plays a critical role in our society by keeping us up to date by providing information about the globe. It is considered by,
community
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a community
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 that these days media influence the population in
dark
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 way. I totally agree with
this
 notion and give reasons for
this
.
To begin
 with, the
news
are
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 fake
few
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a few
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 time and promoters only care about
promotion
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the promotion
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 of their channel. To explain it, to gain
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more TRP the
news
 anchors shoot fake
news
 to
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forcompete
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compete
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complete
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 their
revials
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rivals
reveals
reviews
.
For example
, a study is conducted by oxford university about the
news
 and the results
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found is only 5 anchor among the 15 provide correct information during the experiment and
rest
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 was fake just to get a surge in salary.
As a result
, it
affect
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 the
knoweldge
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knowledge
 of folks who believe
news
as
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is
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 a trustable source of information.
Furthermore
, the
news
 influence the
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youngsters
in
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on
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negative
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a negative
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 side. To explicate
it
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,
the
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teenagers believe what they learn from
reliable
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a reliable
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source
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sources
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 and try to follow.
For instance
, a famous star was shown in
news
 with
easy
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an easy
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 success story
by
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of
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 selling illegal products in past, which
encourge
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encourage
 children
those
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who
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 enter
in
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puberty to go on
wrong
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the wrong
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 way.
Hence
, it is proven that it
enhance
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 the crime rate by showing
irresponsiblity
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irresponsibility
 towards the nation. In conclusion, not only the programme shows fake data but
also
promote
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promotes
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the
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irrelevant actions towards the
country
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 economy.
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