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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverlkess. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweugh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverlkess #people #vehicles #passengers #driverless #outweugh
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