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Students should choose a University major that prepares them for high- paying careers. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#students #university #high- #careers
It is an obvious fact that every people want to execute their study in order to live a decent livelihood.
Therefore
, they opt
a
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University
 that helps them
for
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 a high paid career. I agree with the notion to great extent. I shall support my opinion with an example. At the outset, There are innumerable demerits if they do not join
university
.
Firstly
, if they go to private colleges they only get scholarships but do not get better education which is imperative for them.
Secondly
, the teaching methods of
the
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government colleges are not sufficient for academics.Even though they do study free of cost yet due to overlapping of students they cannot do personal attention.
Thus
, pupils are unable to understand topics. Turning to positive points, if students execute their
studies
 at universities
Then
 it would provide a decent livelihood owing to them not only getting a better education but
also
 can get jobs while studying in 3rd year of their
studies
. To epitome, Chandigarh
university
 is the best
university
 in the world it takes the guarantee to take after pass out they provide high-paid careers to become more affluent in their life.
Moreover
, they can start their teaching career at the same
university
 as well as they can take part in many events which are related to
studies
instead
 of doing theory they can learn practically.
Hence
, it is better for those who are pursuing
studies
 at
university
. To sum up,
although
 there
are
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 one merit of colleges if learners do study there but its demerits are not overlapping its merits.
Therefore
, studying at
university
 provides countless things to students that they cannot obtain at college.
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