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Q) The Internet is generally considered as a blessing for mankind. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The chart provides information about the
way
 in which people are asking for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June. Overall, the greatest change in
type
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 of the
request
 is illustrated in the
in
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in-person
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person
 type of
request
. The most popular
way
 for
requests
 was by telephone from January to march.
However
, in the middle of
March
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 the situation changed and
in-
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the in-person
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person
way
 of
request
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 has become
most
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 popular.
Moreover
, from January to the middle of February in
person
, the
way
 of
request
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 was the least popular one, but the situation has changed and
requests
 by letter have become the least popular.
In
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person
 kind of
requests
 popularity has changed magnificently from the least popular one to the most used. Usage of
telephone
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the telephone
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 for
request
 has felt increase, but not so dramatically as in
person
way
 from 900 to 1600. Only one
way
 of
requests
 has felt
decrease
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is
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requests
 by letters from 780 to 380.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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