Reading books keeps a person’s mind active, whereas watching films and TV is passive and does not require a person to use their imaginations. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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perspective that reading requires

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of attention

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whereas

watching movies and TV would not require that much person's attention. In my

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I partially agree

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the fact that reading does involve

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of activeness of the brain compared to

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watching TV and films and I will explain my standpoint with valid examples in the following essay. Reading is

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activity which demands

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of presence of mind .

For example

, if you are reading a

book

and if you just skim over the

content

of the

book

, you might not be able to understand the context unless you read it thoroughly and

then

visualize based on what you read and understood.

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content

, you don't have to build the imagination of what is being shown as it is already visible and you just have to

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. There

little

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or zero brain efforts to understand the dynamics of what is being shown.

however

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reading a

book

with pictures and images,

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could involve less activeness of

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as we all know "pictures speak

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words".

However

, the above statement is not completely true , unless you are watching a highly intense sci-fi movie or thriller show which keeps you on the thinking edge to understand or predict the upcoming scene in the film to uncover the suspense.

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, while reading if the

content

is too boring or not interesting,

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complete track of the plot and won't find the

book

worth reading .

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, in

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if certain portions are not intriguing or

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fascinating

facinating

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fascinating

then

you always go over those sections and eventually in the end you would find the conclusion of the movie

Therefore

, In my closing statement for the essay , would say it altogether depends upon the

content

which

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reading and watching determines the level of your attentiveness.

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