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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say this is a positive trend, while others argue that it leads to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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In
this
 advanced era, computer
technology
 is spreading massively. Though few
people
 think that it is a positive development., while others have opposing views. In my point of view, I will stand with the former view.
To begin
 with, though
computers
 have made our lives easier, now our lives revolve around
this
technology
.
For example
. We can use
computers
 for shopping, studies or even virtual tours, which was impossible without the internet. Especially in
this
 pandemic, where everyone has been isolated at their places, the computer is the one that helps us to cope with
this
 situation I guess without the massive spread of
computers
 we would have died.
Furthermore
,
this
technology
 is serving us in all aspects of life
such
 as
people
 working from home, homeschooling, home tutoring, and online businesses even though online meetings are being held through
this
 device. But
on the other hand
, where it is serving
people
 in many ways, somewhere it is being used for illegitimate reasons too.
For example
,
hence
, it is a good source of getting in touch with
people
 but somehow,
people
 use it to troll others.
additionally
, it is sometimes, a good source of wasting time
such
 as a person scrolling down and having no idea how long has he wasted his time . On the flip side,
this
 can be best illustrated by saying that
people
 are obsessed with using
computers
 for no reason but because of their easy availability and ,
accessibility
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 it’s destroying our youth ,especially our children. Overall, I strongly believe that the computer has become our essential need now, and it is being used around the globe, but with proper guidelines and limitations we can use it in a much better way it is a
technology
 that serves us in every way we should get benefitted because it has no comparison in its advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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