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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon.Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In our modern world,
students
 have become a virtual learning process, but due to the development of technology,
this
 is now only a fragment, and online
education
 has the opportunity to reach a lot of people.
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 I will give my opinion. On the one hand, face-to-face
education
 has its own advantages. Forming the social background of children is as important as their
education
. After graduation, when they start working, social
knowledge
 will allow them to communicate better.
Also
, if the college is outside the city,
students
 should not stay in the dormitories.
For example
, it not only increases our
knowledge
,
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 but
also
 teaches values
such
 as accuracy, discipline and ethics.
On the other hand
, I believe that traditional lectures are more competent.
In addition
, in order to realize
such
knowledge
, it is necessary to acquire both conceptual and practical
knowledge
, and e-learning seems to lack real experience
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 since the interaction with the teacher is significantly reduced. Usually, seminars, events, outdoor activities… etc. Are conducted to encourage
students
 not to fall behind in their studies. If these pathways are eliminated,
students
 who lack self-discipline and self-awareness may cheat and become discouraged during online learning. In conclusion,
although
 there are many positive effects that online
education
 brings, I strongly believe that traditional
education
 is a better way of teaching and cannot be replaced because they
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become familiar with their classmates, which makes them more confident and able to be active in decision-making in the workplace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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