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While some people think that the problem with education in poor countries is the teaching methodology used , others believe it is the lack of resources that is the roal issues. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #education #countries #methodology #lack #resources
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Nowadays,it has often been argued by some people that the primary issue associated with
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 the methods of teaching, whereas some argue that
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 of teaching resources is the main reason.In my opinion , I will discuss both of them
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developing
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. On the one hand, some individuals argue that the teaching method is responsible for the teaching distribution in undeveloped land because universities are still focusing on the conventional style mostly relays on theory rather than practical
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, which imparts a real-life experience to a student,if a pupil could not get enough practical knowledge, it would be hard for him or her to achieve their future goals and it will not be possible by reading only.
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, In India,departments are mostly theoretical teaching as compared to practical
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of them.
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, some argue that
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 of resources in poor
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 problem today's study requires to
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, computers, the internet and
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 teachers.
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 crucial part of
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computer knowledge is important for research in
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online sources for study in today's era , and it is
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needed
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 to have a qualified teacher for learning,how to operate a computer
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,there are some
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 which do not have sufficient internet access for everyone.
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,In Africa, there are some village schools,where they
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 have computers and teachers for primary faculty as well as some villages,
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 do not have internet connections. In
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,the methodology is responsible for the problem.
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,resources are
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 accountable for the weak education system,
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 these two issues need to
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address
 to mitigate the present solution in emerging
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Teaching methodology
  • Resources
  • Critical thinking
  • Innovative teaching styles
  • Culturally relevant
  • Infrastructure
  • Basic educational resources
  • Quality teacher training
  • Teacher development
  • Educational outcomes
  • Combined approach
  • Cultural contexts
  • Local materials
  • Short-term gains
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