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Mobile phones ownership one of the controversial topics

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Mobile phone ownership is one of the controversial topics which frequently discussed nowadays as many people find that they can’t live without their mobile
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, others see that governments should impose rules and
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 to organize using of mobile devices ,particularly in public areas and while driving. Everyone should realize that he is not living alone, and respecting the
laws
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, rules and rights of others should be always in mind. Meantime, we can’t ignore a major part of the mobile
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 in the life of each one. When it comes to rights and duties, we can see two opinions. The
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 one related to the supporters of carrying mobile
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 everywhere without any restrictions, they believe that we are living in the development era and we can’t impose
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 restrictions on the mobile phone that consider the most important instrument in our life as we are finalising all tasks like work, payments, communications and even tiny tasks through it.
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, the opponents of using mobile
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 without restrictions normally claim and mention that most car accidents and other types of crimes because of the careless use of mobile
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,
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 a greater need for rules and
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 is necessary to eliminate and mitigate of all issues related to these devices. In a conclusion, I personally believe that both opinions are equally important to achieve the balance between using mobile
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 and respecting the
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, and neglecting any opinion of them will hamper the growth of a balanced and responsible society.

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