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It is commonly believed that some people are with certain talents for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both views and give tour opinion.

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It is often thought that some functions that require talents
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 as sports and music can be taught to any child.
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, some people disagree with
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 statement. In
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 essay, I will illustrate my point of view and support it with examples as well.
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 of all, in my opinion, I believe that music can not be taught, having a wonderful voice is a gift and practising it will develop your performance for sure but only when you are already qualified. In fact, musicians and singers are gifted with impeccable voices, you can tell that since their childhood period, they were talented compared to the other kids, even though they did not attend any musical tutoring classes, they were basically born with
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 talent.
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, athletes and famous sports players did not accomplish
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 whole success without constant training. There is a huge difference between sport and music, you can not be a professional singer or musician if you had not gotten the talent in the
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 place,
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, you can easily succeed in the sports field with a little training.
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, it usually depends on the kid's interests, whatever field they are interested in, they will be motivated and inspired to practice more and work harder.
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, Cristiano Ronaldo a famous football player did not achieve
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 whole success without hard work and devoted effort. In conclusion, from my perspective, I think that the key to developing a future is hard work no matter what sector you are interested in, constant training sure will improve your performance as well.
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