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Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement?

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In the modern world, technological advancement has affected every sector and so is farming. It is often argued that the agricultural sector
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benefitted from scientific developments. In my personal view, technology has replaced traditional farming and brought several advantages to agriculture with lesser effort and more
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, with scientific developments, the involvement of machines is increased resulting in the reduction of human efforts.
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 results in the opportunity for the manpower to get engaged in other productive fields.
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, tractors are used to dig the land for cultivation which would require a number of labours in conventional farming to complete a small area of land.
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 allows the labours involved to look for other jobs and employment.
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, with the technological development in agriculture,
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 has comparatively increased.
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 is because of the use of better seeds, a more systematic way of cultivation and insecticides and pesticides.
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, any produces can be cultivated at any season with the help of greenhouses along with their safe storage because of the facilitated cold storage. Admittedly, traditional farming has its own benefits that include the development of coordination and deep relationship between the labours, the organic taste of the organic
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 and many more. As the conventional way of
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 is labour-intensive,it is not feasible for mass
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, nowadays, it is used for home farming only. In conclusion, scientific development has obviously brought several benefits to agriculture that has led
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 mass
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, lesser efforts of human resources, lesser wastage and many more.
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