Some people believe that secondary school children should study international news as a subject. Others say that this is wasting time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today 's
world
, things around the globe keep evolving at a lightning speed.
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to keep pace with the
world
, it is imperative to know what is happening around the globe.
Therefore
, it becomes essential that
adolacent
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adolescent
adolescents
are groomed about what's going around the
world
by including the international
news
subject
.
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, some folks might be against
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views and give my opinion.
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international
news
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in
secondary
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school
curriculum
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has many benefits .
Firstly
, it will give children insights
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what is happening around the
world
and
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effects on their country and people.
Secondly
, it will enable them
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and progressive thinking which enable
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grow up as
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individuals capable
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good decisions.
Thirdly
, it will facilitate them in taking up their future career. For
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If a student has some inclination towards political affairs and he/she is exposed to that at
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age
then
he or she can make a better career out of it
However
, there are some minor drawbacks to
this
as well. One of the possible reason could be if there get involved too much in the international
news
then
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that
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school
subjects might be impacted and it will overall
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their
school
grade. Another downside is that if
this
subject
is not graded
then
students not interested would not take it seriously and eventually it would
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loss of their time as nothing valuable is learnt
Therefore
, in my conclusion, I would say international
news
subject
can be added as
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subject
in
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secondary
school
so students interested can opt
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broaden horizons
  • cultures
  • global issues
  • critical thinking
  • engaged citizens
  • activism
  • interconnected
  • curriculum
  • workloads
  • bias
  • core subjects
  • career prospects
  • informed
  • global citizens
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