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Many customs and traditional ways of behaviors are no longer relevant to the modern life and no worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?

#customs #behaviors #life
Nowadays,
people
 have
new
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trend
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of
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 lifestyle,
some
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and some
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 of them might think
customs
 and traditional
way
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ways
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 of
behaviors
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behavior
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 are not suitable anymore. In my opinion,
customs
 still play a pivotal
roll
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, which does not means we must use the
orginal
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original
way
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. The main reason I agree with keeping the
customs
 is that each culture full of stories and meanings, which
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 valuable and
preious
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precious
previous
. The story is not made be one day and it
shoud
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should
could
 not be removed by one day.
For example
, in Taiwanese aboriginal hunting culture, the ceremony of
pig
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 slaughter is performed while there is a wedding. The man would hunt a pig and allocate
to
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 their family and friends. Nowadays,
people
 dose not hunt anymore, but we still
having
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 meals with
pig
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 together to keep the
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 of
this
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customs
.
However
, when most
people
 talk about
customs
 and traditional ceremony, the
first
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come
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 up to Mom's mind is "exhausted". The main reason is that each
costoms
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customs
 origin from
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 different antique story, which
lead
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 to the
calturl
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cultural
capture
culture
 ceremony
become
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 sophisticated.
For example
, the dinner
of
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on
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 Chinese New
Year
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 Eve which
usually
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 cooked by Mom
ande
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and
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 Grandma is ruled to be with
varity
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variety
 dished fullfuiied
taditional
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traditional
 meaning. 
People
nowadadys
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nowadays
 tend to go to a restaurant for avoiding cooking
by
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 own.
This
way
 not only can keep the traditional
behavier
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behaviour
 but
also
 can release the stress of Mom. It perfectly shows the
way
 to keep the
customs
 in a new method. In
conclution
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conclusion
, even though the
trational
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traditional
customs
 are meaningful,
the
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modern
people
 prefer to keep the culture in another method. In my
pespective
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perspective
, it is a win-win
choose
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 because we can avoid the
complecated
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complicated
 prosses but
also
 can keep the
customs
 at the same time. The most
importance
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 thing is that we can have a lovely moment with someone we love.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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