Many customs and traditional ways of behaviors are no longer relevant to the modern life and no worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
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lifestyle,
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and some
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of them might think
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and traditional
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way
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of
behaviors
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are not suitable anymore. In my opinion,
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still play a pivotal
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, which does not means we must use the
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original
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to
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. The main reason I agree with keeping the
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is that each culture full of stories and meanings, which
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valuable and
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precious
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. The story is not made be one day and it
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should
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, in Taiwanese aboriginal hunting culture, the ceremony of
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slaughter is performed while there is a wedding. The man would hunt a pig and allocate
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their family and friends. Nowadays,
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dose not hunt anymore, but we still
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meals with
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together to keep the
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of
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customs
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.
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, when most
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talk about
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and traditional ceremony, the
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up to Mom's mind is "exhausted". The main reason is that each
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customs
origin from
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different antique story, which
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to the
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cultural
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culture
ceremony
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sophisticated.
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, the dinner
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Chinese New
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Eve which
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cooked by Mom
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Grandma is ruled to be with
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variety
dished fullfuiied
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traditional
meaning. 
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nowadadys
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nowadays
tend to go to a restaurant for avoiding cooking
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own.
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not only can keep the traditional
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behaviour
but
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can release the stress of Mom. It perfectly shows the
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to keep the
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in a new method. In
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conclusion
, even though the
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traditional
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are meaningful,
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modern
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prefer to keep the culture in another method. In my
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perspective
, it is a win-win
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because we can avoid the
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complicated
prosses but
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can keep the
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at the same time. The most
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thing is that we can have a lovely moment with someone we love.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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