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Global warming is the biggest threat we are experiencing today? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, people argue that global warming is getting a severe problem for us. I endorse
this
 essay owing to a number of reasons that will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, it is true that
this
 problem is one of the serious matters in our society because a number of people and other creatures like animals or plants might suffer from it.
However
, people affect global warming. They usually use plastic items because they give a huge amount of benefits
such
 as reducing their time and offering convenient life.
However
, most of the litter burns in the incinerator as it is hard to decompose in the ground.
Moreover
, it can lead to other serious pollution like air.
In addition
, the majority of citizens have air conditioners at home, which is harmful effects on the temperature of the earth. On the one hand, it is obvious that they will have a bad experience.
For instance
, it might lead them to lack food or water resources that the most necessary things in human life as all weather is getting hotter, especially the summer will be longer than before. If the temperature of the earth increases more and more, they cannot survive all over the world;
furthermore
, they can bring various conflicts between countries in order to find other countries that can fulfil their requisition.
Therefore
, it can lead them to take damages
such
 as scarce resources like water of food and, have conflict because of it .
Therefore
, we should find a way to solve
this
 problem with all nations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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