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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems to increase the cost of fuels. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are numerous problems associated with the environment. It is argued
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, many people that in order to resolve
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 concern, an upsurge in fuel prices is a good idea. I totally disagree with the aforementioned statement.
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 with, an increase in the resource rate, not only drain the pockets of citizens but
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 impact the budget nation. To explicate, due to the rise in the cost of fossils, responsible people have to pay a higher amount in order to buy the raw material which directly shakes the allocated amount for that sector.
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, the headline of ' India times' mentioned that there is an unlimited strike to show anger towards the huge shift in the price of fuel.
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, it is proven that dramatic surges ruin the economy of a state.
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, it can effectively control global warming up to an extent. To explain, the population uses vehicles for commuting to and from work. Expensive charges might encourage individuals to use public transportation and carpooling, which give birth to new challenges for the authorities.
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survey it is found that the use of government transportation can only control 3% of climate changes.
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, it will arise major problems for leaders and might invite civil war in the country. In conclusion, one can say that
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 burning fuel is a factor behind the global issue, there are many other elements which need to address along with that.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • disproportionately
  • viability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • economic disruptions
  • sustainable transport options
  • cleaner energy sources
  • public transportation
  • global trade
  • strict regulations
  • alternative energy
  • consumption
  • incentives
  • accessible alternatives
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