Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
A group of individuals presents the view that the happiest time of one's life is when they are teens,
while
others believe that despite Linking Words
adults
' responsibilities, they are more likely to be more satisfied with their lives. I strongly agree with the latter opinion.
On the one hand, some people justifiably argue that Use synonyms
adults
can benefit from a wide range of activities that make them feel happy. Use synonyms
Firstly
, they can pursue careers that match their interests and talents. Following Linking Words
such
careers gives them a sense of satisfaction, which is vital to being positive and happy. Linking Words
Secondly
, developing your own family and living with your loved ones are things that can bring a true sense of joy and fulfilment. Linking Words
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adults
decide to go on a holiday, they are very likely to benefit from the necessary resources. Use synonyms
In contrast
to children, they are independent and are able to afford a vocation without worrying about their financial or educational status, which can improve their moods.
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On the other hand
, another group claims that since Linking Words
teenagers
are supported by parents and do not suffer from having tight schedules, they can be happier. They firmly insist that children not only benefit from peace of mind but Use synonyms
also
spend quality time with peers. Linking Words
Consequently
, having high standards of living provided by parents, Linking Words
teenagers
should not have any issues that make them sad or disappointed. Use synonyms
However
, I do not find Linking Words
this
argument convincing. Linking Words
Although
financial stability and excellent amenities play a significant role in one's happiness, other factors should be taken into consideration. Linking Words
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teenagers
are deprived of the freedom that they desire. In Use synonyms
this
regard, they may have to participate in compulsory voluntary work as a part of school programs. Linking Words
In addition
, they are sometimes compelled to go to bed early, leading to several mental problems Linking Words
such
as depression, which hinder them from being as happy as possible.
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To conclude
, in my view, living as an adult provides the opportunity to be satisfied with your life. From my perspective, there are several activities, having a well-paid job and getting married, Linking Words
for instance
, making Linking Words
adults
happy, Use synonyms
while
most Linking Words
teenagers
are not allowed to experience what they enjoy.Use synonyms
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