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You and your family are living in rented accommadation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with rhe condition of some of the furniture.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you doing great. I am a tenant in one of your accommodations. I am writing
this
 letter to bring your attention to some of the unable furniture as a part of the rental arrangement. I am hoping that you could fix or replace them with new ones. I live in your apartment
last
 four months. In the beginning,we are extremely satisfied and happy when we moved into the apartment but unfortunately,we found that some of the furniture is out of date.
For instance
, the air condition has noisy sounds and water is leaking since we have lived.
Also
, the fridge does not maintain a normal temperature and
this
 is the reason why our food turned bad quickly. One more thing, the dinner table leg has broken. I hope you will look into the matter and give me an immediate reply. I think the best way to solve the problem is to replace it with a better one. Sincerely, Laylo Rustamova Rustamova Laylo
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