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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You would like to be work in a different city to be closer to your family. Write a letter to your employer to request a transfer to another office. In the letter: – Explain why you would like to move – Request that your employer place you in a specific city – Request that it be completed by a certain date Write at least 150 words.

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Dear sir, I am writing
this
 letter regarding my placement of work near to my hometown which is closer to my family. My name is Leo and I am the supervisor and working under your company for the
last
 15 years. The reason behind
this
 request is my wife is 7 months pregnant and I am the only male member in my family to take care of their needs and regular doctor appointment check-ups. Driving to work from home takes 2 2-hour drive.
Furthermore
, during the winter season days become shorter. Having pregnant women in the house needs somebody closer during
this
 time. I am kindly requesting you to please take
this
 issue into consideration and help me to come out from
this
 issue.
As it
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 needs to be sorted out next month so that I will get enough time to complete my tasks on time. Looking forward to hearing from you soon, Best regards, Leo
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logical structure
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single idea per paragraph
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greeting and closing
You have a clear and polite opening and closing, which contributes to a professional tone.
complete response
Your request and the justification for it are clearly presented, showing a good level of task achievement.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful, which is suitable for the context.

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