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Some people believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop childrens' life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do ypu agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there are different models of education. Some believe that physical activity contributes to the acquisition of
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 in a child, while others,
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, pay more attention to the development of theoretical books. But despite
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, I believe that physical activity contributes to the acquisition of
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, but I want to consider
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 not be forgotten that books give people a certain spiritual component. On the one hand, written information in a book or other paper medium provides a theoretical part. With it, you can learn about things that you have never done or seen.The theoretical aspect helps to avoid mistakes or failures, as well as warn against danger due to awareness.
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, mastering
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 is impossible without practice itself.
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, it is very important to pay attention to the development of
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skills
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 from the side of the development of physical
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. All the same, the theory obtained can be refuted and the application of
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 knowledge can be individual. A person should always try
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,
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 he will know about
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 matter. And if a child repeats the same actions for a long time,
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 will form a
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 skill in him. In conclusion, I want to affirm that education, both spiritual and theoretical, as well as physically active, is very important and continuously connected not only in the upbringing of a child
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 in
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. But still, in order to acquire
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skills
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, it is practice and actions that are required in its commission.
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