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 For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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Education
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 various parts. We must learn and master all of it. And because
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electronic
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 have been upgrading the use of
computer
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 is widely known. I agree that
computer
 skills should be part of our education. Most
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the
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people nowadays use
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a computer
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computer
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with
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 their everyday job. We cannot deny the fact that it helps us a lot on finishing our work quickly and can save more time.
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 in the past, teachers are just writing their lecture
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 a piece of notebook which is vulnerable because it might get wet and or lost. But recently, with the help of computers, they can
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 type their lectures and just save
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. Without thinking it might get
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.
Secondly
, most companies are requiring applicants to know how to use computers. Because by using
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computer
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,
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managers can monitor their
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 with their work through the
computer
 and they will be sure that it
is keep
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 safe on the
computer
. Rather than in a paper. In my opinion,
computer
 skill is
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 important same
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 writing,reading and math. And it should be part of
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students
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 curriculum.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Information technology
  • Essential skills
  • Integration
  • Technological prowess
  • Curriculum
  • Global competitiveness
  • 21st-century skills
  • Pedagogy
  • Access to information
  • Innovation
  • Digital divide
  • Educational equity
  • Online learning platforms
  • Digital native
  • Coding and programming
  • Computer proficiency
  • Technological fluency
  • E-learning
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