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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin a learning a foriegn language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do advantages of this outwiegh the disadvantages?

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Some professionals think that studying foreign languages at primary
school
 is more effective than in secondary
school
.
This
 essay will discuss the good sides and drawbacks of
this
 topic.
Children
 who are 5-6 ages are good to learn anything easily. Their mental skill is better than an adult
for example
 receiving new things and memorising.
Therefore
 they do not forget what they have learned in their childhood.
Furthermore
, they can advance their learning
language
 ability in the future.
However
 learning a
language
 at a young
time
 is crucial, but it has negative sides in it. Most parents wish their
children
 to be educated.
Thus
 they prefer to demand
children
 when they are young approximately 5-6 age. But childhood needs to be memorable and unforgettable. They must not spend their
time
 at the front desk. Because it may affect the
children
 who feel they are isolated from the social and can not communicate with others.
In addition
, It may cause
children
's ability to communicate.
For example
, I know my cousin that just learn at her home, she lost her social and became shy and speechless.
On the other hand
,
children
 studying all
time
 may have a mental illness because of long
time
 learning. That's why foreign
language
 is extremely hard to study and
children
 may get tired of it.
Finally
, beginning to study a foreign
language
 is vital, as
children
 may encounter a lot of problems.
Also
, they have to spend their childhood very happily. The
school
 must be their other home to be themselves, not demand to learn the
language
. In my opinion,
children
 should study other languages at their secondary
school
.
Submitted by Naran on

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