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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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Recently rising
food
 demand worldwide has been brought into focus.
This
 essay intends to discuss the
reasons
 for
this
 growth and proposes some suggestions. There are several causes of increasing
food
 needs. One of the main
reasons
 is the dramatic rise in the global population. Over the
last
 century, the number of
people
 in the world has increased, reaching 8 billion in 2022. Unfortunately,
food
 production has yet to keep pace. Climate changes are happening due to various
reasons
, namely acid rain, the depletion of the ozone layer and global warming, leading to a decrease in the
food
 produced. Another factor that affects the increase in
food
 needs is the rising income of citizens in developing countries. The more wealthy they are, the more nutritious
food
 they buy. To address
this
 global
food
 shortage, businesses and governments will have to work together.
Firstly
, the government should invest in new technologies and provide the area under cultivation for farmers.
For instance
, they could allow scientists to investigate genetically modified foods to fulfil
food
 demands worldwide.
In addition
, the government needs to participate actively in educating farmers about using
such
 techniques and products. Another step which can go in the long term is to reduce
food
 waste.
This
 can be done by launching international campaigns to raise
people
's awareness of the consequences of
food
 waste.
Therefore
, it could educate
people
 to change their behaviours in
food
 consumption. To sum up, there are many
reasons
 for the increase in
food
 demand,
however
, with specific measures
such
 as the government spending money on researching modern farming techniques and educating farmers or
people
 to stop wasting
food
,
this
 issue will be tackled soon.
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