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Many newspapers print news information about private life of famous people. Why do they do it? What effect does it have on famous people’s life?

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Nowadays, many tabloids are prying into the lives of famous personalities.
Thus
, it seems that many popular superstars are suffered from the
media
, but in my opinion, the truth is covered up. In
this
 essay, I will explain the effects of
media
 on famous
people
’s lives and why the press
are
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 interested in these
people
.
First
 of all, we should consider that the
media
 has been playing a vital role in someone’s fame.
In other words
, many celebrities may get lots of benefits from newspapers. One of the advantages is being in the headlines to achieve more fame.
For instance
, some actors haven’t artistic talents but they are famous because they are in the public eye for their flamboyant clothes or they are known as
a
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notorious
people
 ,not as an artist. So, as far as I am concerned, these notorious
people
 couldn’t be famous, if newspapers didn’t write about them.
However
, being surrounded by photographers have disadvantages too, because well-known
people
 don’t have privacy at all. Not only famous
people
 are using newspapers, but
also
 they are beneficial for them too. These days, many young
people
 tend to follow up
popular
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 faces in magazines or social
media
. So, the press should spread more news about famous
people
 in order to boost their
selling
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.
Furthermore
, many paparazzi are being paid by well-known
people
 to build images from their characters and make them popular. To sum up, in my point of view, both
media
 and celebrities have benefits for each other.
In other words
, well-known
people
 should protect their ephemeral fame. So they get used to not having private lives.
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