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It is said that people’s life now is becoming more and more stressful. What are the causes and how to solve it?

#people’s #life
In
this
 generation and age is certain and known that the general lifestyle become so much more full of stress. Probably
this
 common feeling
born
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 to what the working and career world now requires. Everything is more frenetic, as the time was
more long
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 than 24 hours per day. Talking about
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the job
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job
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jobs
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 is usual to see people which, after a full day
spend
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 in their offices, still working
in
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on
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the bus
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bus
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,
home
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 and
bar
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. In my
opinion
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 everyone cannot really cross a line between
the
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apply
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working life and personal time.
Hence
this
 is so dangerous
,
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because if you are spending a day with your family, you should not be angry
for
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 business.
Although
reduce
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reducing
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 stress is so difficult, because you are supposed to be always online for working
call
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, a good idea foul be
try
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 to turn
of
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 all thoughts regarding
office
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the office
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 and spend more good time with the person
we
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you
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 love
,
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 and
doing
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do
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the thing
a thing
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thing
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things
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 that
make
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ourself
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you
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 feel good.
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