Families who send their children to private school should not be required to pay taxes that support the state educational system Do you agree or disagree?

Universe
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has given me a precious gift.
i.e
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i.e.
my
body
. It follows my command irrespective of any questions. Now it’s my duty to take care of it. •Nothing in life is more important than my physical
health
. •My
body
is designed to be well. •I am in control of my physical destiny. •I can exercise a tremendous amount
to
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control over how my
body
ages biologically. •The best investment I can ever make is in my own
HEALTH
. •I believe in listening to my
body
. It knows what it needs in terms of food and
what
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exercise and movements it needs. •I have a strong
will power
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willpower
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to control my
health
and fitness. Fuck my excuses, Now I really need to focus
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on dedication & discipline. •Exercise &
the
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right amount of nutrition
is
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what
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requires
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to achieve my goal in
health
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the health
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&
fitness
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and fitness
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category. •I absolutely never get sick. •Excellent
health
= True Freedom. •I love my
body
. I want to be
best
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version of myself. •My past actions don’t define who am I now. •I accept myself and I am worthy of care and happiness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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