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It is becoming increasingly popular for school leavers to take a year off (a gap year) before going to university. Do the advantages of this outweigh any disadvantages?

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Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly popular for high school graduates to take a gap
year
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 before enrolling on a
university
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. In my opinion, the disadvantages of
this
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 trend outweigh the benefits, and I will explain my reasons below.
To begin
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 with,
students
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 who instantly go to
university
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 after finishing high school will focus on taking a course than other activities.
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,
students
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 who have big ambitions for their career life, they will have deeper knowledge and skills that prepare them for their future career life.
In contrast
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, school leavers who take a
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 off will focus on doing other activities, and not focus on their career plan.
For example
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, in Indonesia,
students
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 who take a
year
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 off usually fulfil their free time by doing unproductive activities
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 as taking a long trip or just simply enjoying their social life and doing nothing.
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,
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 tuition fees are
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 gradually increasing every
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, so it is more beneficial if someone goes to
university
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 sooner.
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, even though
students
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 can have extra time to prepare themself by taking a gap
year
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, they could get too comfortable with their condition and waste their time by doing nothing.
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, they could be forgotten all the knowledge taught before, and suffer in the process of
university
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 enrollment. These circumstances could bring challenges for them to go to
university
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. To conclude, in my point of view, the disadvantages of taking a gap
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 outweigh any advantages.
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,
students
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 should be mindful before deciding to take a
year
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 off.
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