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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.Do you think is a positive or negative development?

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in
this
 modern era, the important concern of the same
products
 available in every
country
 has become highly controversial. There are those who believe that the availability of the same
products
 has some positive ways ,
however
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 others believe that there have some problems. In
this
 essay, I will examine both sides of the argument and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there is a main reason why
people
 believe that the same
products
 which overseas have some good ways. Perhaps the main reason why
people
 are in favour of it as a good idea is because of the cost and time-saving. if
people
 get the things which are overseas that can
also
 prevent the loss from the huge amount of money and time expenditure.
For example
, humans don't have to go outside of the
country
,
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 or travel a long way to purchase. despite these arguments, there is
also
 a case for the idea that it can reduce the
country
's economic GDP.
in addition
, the government can be faced a tourist shortage. a good illustration of
this
 is that tourists visit foreign countries to see the things which are not available in their county, so if they can get to their
country
 the ratio of the money made through tourist's business will be finished, Where GDP income will get a low percentage.
Further
, the cost level of the overseas
products
 will be higher to buy. Which can be difficult for some middle-class families to purchase those
products
. In conclusion,
this
 is must be said that the availability of the same
products
 which are overseas has become a complex issue with no easy solution. But Having considered both sides of the issue,
i
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 would argue that if a
country
 can maintain the product's availability
then
 it will be good for both government and the
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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