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You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbour complained. Write a letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won't happen again.

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Letter You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbour complained. Write a letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it will not happen again. My dear John, I regret my rude behaviour. I cannot express
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 words the sense of shame and guilt that I have been feeling since
last
 night. I feel much degraded in my own eyes for having played music and misbehaved with
such
 a nice friend as you. I remained upset throughout the night. My parents have decided to celebrate my birthday.
Therefore
 I celebrated my birthday with
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friends
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. During that
occasion
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 we played music too loud. I am really sorry
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that your peace
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was breacked
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breached
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 by us. And it will not happen again. Now I realize that I was at fault. I really hope you will forgive me for being so thoughtless. I am really sorry for my misbehaviour
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towards you. I apologize to you for my folly. We have been good friends for eight years. We
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should
 not fall apart over a trifle. I request you to forget the whole episode and come to my residence on Saturday
next
 to have dinner with me. Yours sincerely,
Sevinch
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Seventh
Serving
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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