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More people is moving to the big city to live and work. What are the reasons and results of this trend?

Since the world has developed, moving from an urban
area
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 to living in a big
city
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 is necessary for most
people
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.
People
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 have started to move far from their hometowns to stay in the centre of the
city
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 because they believe that living in the
city
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 will make them a better life.
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 essay will provide reasons and results of why
people
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 stay in the
city
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 and work. To commence, living in big cities will
increase
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 job opportunities for
people
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.
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, widens the selection of careers one can choose from.
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 is beneficial, as different individuals possess different skills and expertise which are suitable for different types of work.
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, an individual may be extremely talented in computer science, but have limited abilities in engineering. In the suburbs, only a job in engineering may be available.
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, both jobs are available in the
city
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.
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, working in the
city
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 tends to earn a higher salary than working in
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 countryside.
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, there are many public
transportst
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transports
transport
 in the
city
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,
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 as sky-train, buses, and tubes to transport from one place to another, which is cheaper than owning a car.
On the other hand
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, migrating into the
city
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 may pose negative effects on the population. An example is overcrowdedness, which may lead to high competition for job applications. The
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 in population density in an
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 will be accompanied by an
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 in transportation. As a consequence, there will be a rise in higher greenhouse gas emissions,
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 as carbon dioxide. As well as speeding up global warming in the long term, it
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 deteriorates
people
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's health. Another potential issue is the
people
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 started to move into the
city
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 to live and work, the result can be a negative effect on everyone. The
city
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 will be overcrowded and
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 be an
increase
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 in the competition for jobs every year.
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, when the
city
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 is overcrowded, there will be an
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 in population and
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 an
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 in carbon dioxide emissions.
People
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 started to inhale lots of carbon dioxide because of the traffic, which can lead to unhealthy health. On top of that, there will
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 be an
increase
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 in the
crimes
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 rate.
People
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 started to do illegal things
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 as drug dealing and robbery, especially in overcrowded areas. In a nutshell, living in the centre of the
city
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 provide outweighs living in the urban
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. There are many benefits and
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 some drawbacks, but I still agree to live in the
city
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 rather than urban
area
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.

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