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Describe the process of chocolate from cacao tree about 150 words.

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Initially
,there are ten various methods in the preparation of chocolate from
cacao
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 tree.The process requires both manual and machinery
works
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work
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.
However
,
the
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apply
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 cacao trees are grown nowhere than
south
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in south
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america
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America
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,
africa
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Africa
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 and Indonesia.In the early stages,the chocolates are found as red pods.once when the red pods are matured,they are harvested and the white cocoa
beans
 are taken
our
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out
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 from
ripe
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the ripe
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 red pods.Followingly,these
beans
 are fermented and they
are spread
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 straight away in sun to dry.Promptly,the
dired
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dried
beans
 are packed in large sacks.The large sacks are routes to
factory
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the factory
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 which are transported by train or lorry.After reaching the factory,the
beans
 are segregated for roasting.they are roasted at 350°C.The roasted
beans
 are crushed and
outer
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 shells are removed by machines.
Lastly
,the gathered inner parts are
grinder
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grinded
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 up by a system and chocolates are collected in liquid form.
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